Perfection
What is perfection?
"No one is perfect"
They all say
In your own head
In your own soul
Everyone is their own perfection
Is one not perfect in the eyes
Of sociaty if
They have flaws?
What if...
It is the flaws
That make us perfect?
Is one not accepted
If they do done conform
To society?
what if...
It is our spirits
Our rebellion against
The giant
Of society
That is perfection?
Is it uncooth to
Break a law
To fight?
What if...
It is our very nature
That causes these
And that in itself
Is perfection?
"No one is perfect"
They all say
What if...
We are all perfect
In our own little way?
K'lam
4/21/2006
12:51:27 AM
What is perfection?
"No one is perfect"
They all say
In your own head
In your own soul
Everyone is their own perfection
Is one not perfect in the eyes
Of sociaty if
They have flaws?
What if...
It is the flaws
That make us perfect?
Is one not accepted
If they do done conform
To society?
what if...
It is our spirits
Our rebellion against
The giant
Of society
That is perfection?
Is it uncooth to
Break a law
To fight?
What if...
It is our very nature
That causes these
And that in itself
Is perfection?
"No one is perfect"
They all say
What if...
We are all perfect
In our own little way?
K'lam
4/21/2006
12:51:27 AM
1 Comments:
There's a lot that could be added to make this poem better. Give the reader images to hold: sights, sounds, details, etc.
Abstract concepts like "perfection" and "imperfection" don't hold my attention and instead make me yawn and think "oh boy. another quasi-philisophical, preachy piece on why we're all special".
I happen to harbor a special fondness for the idea that there is perfection in imperfection, and I think that you've got a good concept/subject going here, but do more with it. Show me something I haven't seen yet.
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